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Month: March 2019

Blog 11

Do you see any patterns?

My writing seems to consist mostly of repeating key terms that my paragraphs are based on, as in this one you can see that the words science, art, and dentist are used numerous times. I’ve also noticed a pattern of transition words, usually “on the other hand”, “however”, “furthermore”, etc.

Do you rely on certain devices more than others?

From the looks of this paragraph, it seems as though I rely mostly on key terms than any of the other devices mentioned. I do believe that when it comes to writing, I try to avoid words like “it” and “that” so that the paper sounds as formal as possible. However, I feel as though I usually incorporate a lot of transitions throughout my writing as they provide an easier way to flow from one topic to the next.

Are there any passages that are hard to follow and if so, can you make them easier to read by trying any of the other devices discussed in this chapter?

I think that throughout most of my free draft, there are TONS of areas that are hard to follow, mostly because I don’t focus on one point throughout the entire paper. If I use all three of the devices given to us from “They Say I Say”, then I think that they will make my paper stronger overall. Not to mention, they will also introduce a clear, organized flow that as of now is what my paper is in need of.

Peer Review Comment 2

Overall, I thought that Owen’s essay was strongly worded and he was going in the right direction. One thing I noticed, however, was that his paper was a bit short, which he had pointed out as well. I suggested that to fix this, he focuses on adding another body paragraph into his essay that explains another reason as to why physical therapy needs art incorporated sciences. I also suggested this because he only had two reasons as to why he needed art to become a physical therapist. I think it would also benefit him to add more quotes to his essay as a way to better explain his arguments. By adding more quotes, he will have more evidence to explain and go off on of how art is beneficial to his education. He should also focus on adding transition sentences between his body paragraphs so that his essay flows more smoothly. Lastly, I recommended that Owen expands on his conclusion, summarizing more on what he discussed in his paper and why he believes that art is beneficial to his career.

Blog 10

My favorite brainstorming activity to use when writing a paper has to be between making columns and free writing. As I was writing my first paper, I found it easy to connect the three texts by bulleting important points made in the essays. Once I had the important information from each one, I’d put a 1, 2, 3, etc next to some of the points connecting the authors’ ideas together. I also enjoyed free writing because it gave me the chance to just type whatever I wanted/needed to let out without thinking too hard about it. Had I spent too much time, I wouldn’t have been able to reach certain points I wanted to make throughout the essay.

Potential Thesis:

I believe that in the curious world that we live in today, art will provide a gateway for inspiration and better explanations that connect to the gigantic, unknown science universe we continually try to explore.

Blog 9

Pinker & Yo-Yo Ma

Steven Pinker and Yo-Yo Ma talk about the importance of sciences in our world not just based off of experiments, but also on religion, and art. Science is often argued as solely a subject with experiments, data, and observations that have nothing to do with art. However, art may play a larger role in the sciences than an individual may think, as they help to compare and inspire ideas. It may be agreeable that science is such a closed society which needs to open up to the world we live in. Pinker states that, “To cultivate the world, we must cultivate work-arounds for our cognitive limitations, including skepticism, open debate, formal precision, and empirical tests, often requiring feats of ingenuity”. Likewise, Ma argues that science needs art to inspire a scientist by allowing their brain to be flexible in the ways in which it studies a subject. Ma states that, “The values behind arts integration – collaboration, flexible thinking, and disciplined imagination – lead to the capacity to innovate”. As Ma argues, arts will introduce more qualities of a successful individual that will allow them to better explain what it is that they are researching. Science is not just about the experiments, or the data, or the observations. It is about being able to understand our limits and using our senses and emotions in ways that other subjects, such as art, can do. After comparing the arguments of Pinker and Ma, I agree that sciences need to open up to the humanities as they will vastly impact the way the scientific universe works.

Text to Self

As a student in the medical field, I can easily say that all types of sciences are important to my education, as well as many other fields students study these days. Science seems to be a large part of our world’s educational society these days because experiments, observations, data, and measurements are always being taken. In a world driven around technology, we are always finding ways to make science easier, find cures for medicine, and angles and tools at which to build buildings. As a future dentist, science even goes into the creation of making an effective toothpaste that will benefit your teeth in all ways possible. When it comes to science, Pinker states that, “It is, rather, indispensable in all areas of human concern, including politics, the arts, and the search for meaning, purpose, and morality.” Essentially, Pinker is telling his audience that science is important in all fields and serves a different meaning for different perspectives in our lives. Personally, I am able to see how science correlates to any field someone may choose to work in. Furthermore, an individual may even notice how their field helps the science world to become more explainable. Whether we want to acknowledge it, or take a science class, or not, science is and always will be a major part of our society.

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